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Katrine, Creative Coach's avatar

This is awesome! You should write more original songs. I love the theme. If I may give you one suggestion: dramatically increase the friction (not resentment, but frustration), to give the song a stronger impact.

Brian Johnson's avatar

Thanks Katrine! I'll keep that in mind. The song leans on the silly side - which is probably more clear if I'd done the whole thing. For example, verse 2:

When you've told me a hundred times

That I should put the toilet seat down

And you say if it happens again

I might as well up and leave town

I try to be good, but then I forget

And suddenly you're all angry and wet

I'm kicked out of bed to sleep on the floor

And that's when I know....

:-)